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The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group.

The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group.
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The table below illustrates the data about the population of New Zealand by
age
 group. The observations were taken in 2011 and 2012 with a percentage gap between these years being shown
aswell
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as well
. In general, only the older generations had experienced
a
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growth. The entire population of New Zealand
of
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about was 4.4 million at that time and had increased by less than a
percent
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. Despite that, the demographic of people under the
age
 of 15 had undergone a decrease from 898
thousand
 down to 896
thousand
.
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 thing happened to people aged between 15 and 39, who represent the largest
age
 group,
had
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 become 0.2% less in magnitude than they used to be in 2011.
In contrast
, the population of
middle aged
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 men and women (40-64) had magnified by 0.6%. Despite remaining as the smallest
age
 group, citizens with
age
being
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65 and lower have grown the most by 24
thousand
 from only 574
thousand
 being
persent
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present
per cent
 before.
Thus
 65+ is the only demographic which has grown by more than one percent in a single year.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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