The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.

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The diagram displays information on the

cost

of one airline

ticket

between

Sydney

and

Melbourne

, Australia, during a two-

week

period in 2013.

Overall

, it is readily apparent that the

cost

of one

ticket

from

Sydney

Melbourne

is higher in both weeks than the

ticket

back to

Sydney

. For

week

1, going to

Melbourne

, the price is higher on Mondays. And back

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Sydney

, is more costly on Fridays.

However

, for

week

2, the journey to

Melbourne

and arriving back to

Sydney

, the price of on

ticket

is expensive on Fridays. The selling price of

one-way

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a one-way

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ticket

from

Sydney

Melbourne

on Monday is $80 in

week

1 but $50 in

week

2. In comparison, from Tuesday to Thursday, the

cost

is the same (below $40) for both weeks.

As well as

, the amount is

also

the same from Friday-Sunday ($75,$70, and $50) respectively.

On the other hand

tickets from

Melbourne

Sydney

during the 2 weeks is most costly in

week

1. The highest

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is at

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$80 on Fridays. Following, $60 on Monday and Saturday, and $50 on Sunday. From Tuesday to Thursday, the

cost

is lower than $40. compared with,

week

2, Monday-Thursday is as well below $40, and on Friday is $60 following $50 on Saturday and Sunday

subsequently

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