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The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.

The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.
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The diagram displays information on the
cost
 of one airline
ticket
 between
Sydney
 and
Melbourne
, Australia, during a two-
week
 period in 2013.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that the
cost
 of one
ticket
 from
Sydney
 to
Melbourne
 is higher in both weeks than the
ticket
 back to
Sydney
. For
week
 1, going to
Melbourne
, the price is higher on Mondays. And back
to
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Sydney
, is more costly on Fridays.
However
, for
week
 2, the journey to
Melbourne
 and arriving back to
Sydney
, the price of on
ticket
 is expensive on Fridays. The selling price of
one-way
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ticket
 from
Sydney
 to
Melbourne
 on Monday is $80 in
week
 1 but $50 in
week
 2. In comparison, from Tuesday to Thursday, the
cost
 is the same (below $40) for both weeks.
As well as
, the amount is
also
 the same from Friday-Sunday ($75,$70, and $50) respectively.
On the other hand
 tickets from
Melbourne
 to
Sydney
 during the 2 weeks is most costly in
week
 1. The highest
at
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 $80 on Fridays. Following, $60 on Monday and Saturday, and $50 on Sunday. From Tuesday to Thursday, the
cost
 is lower than $40. compared with,
week
 2, Monday-Thursday is as well below $40, and on Friday is $60 following $50 on Saturday and Sunday
subsequently
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, ticket, sydney, melbourne, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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