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In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passangers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the rapid development of technologies,
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automotive
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 all
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transportation into
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driverless
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the driverless
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, which is without
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 of
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 as a driver. I believe that
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 will bring more benefits than the possible drawbacks they own.
Driverless
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mode
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 of transportation will lead to a potential solution
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 for efficiency in
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 and energy.
People
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 tend to spend most of their
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 in a day doing nothing other than driving, focusing on
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 and traffic when they can actually do productive activities during the trip.
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, it will only waste of
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 and energy when they do it over and over again without having a solution. Meanwhile, with the
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mode
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,
people
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 can focus on doing a lot of tasks during the trip. Or even just relax and
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 more minutes to rest before arriving at
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. Another benefit is
people
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 can own their car even if they can not drive. The hardest thing that most
people
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 struggle with is
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 for driving to get a
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licence
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, they have to put
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 of effort and
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 it and
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those hard procedure
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 will become a lot easier with
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 help of technology.
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, it is undeniable that the probability of human error in a driving action is still high even though
people
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 already try their best to not make a mistake in it.
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, older
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 who
driving
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 by themselves. In conclusion,
driverless
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 in vehicles
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 many great benefits which are including
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human safety, and
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efficiency in
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 and energy.
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coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay more coherently. Use topic sentences to introduce each paragraph and ensure that your ideas flow logically. Also, aim to include a more detailed and nuanced discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles.
task achievement
You have addressed the task, but there is potential for a more comprehensive and balanced response. Consider presenting a clearer argument by discussing both advantages and disadvantages in more detail. Also, ensure that your examples are relevant and support your points effectively.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • human error
  • road accidents
  • traffic flow
  • congestion
  • fuel efficiency
  • mobility
  • economic impact
  • job displacement
  • technical challenges
  • reliability
  • security
  • ethical concerns
  • legal issues
  • programming algorithms
  • decision-making
  • liability
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