More and more wild animals are on the verge of the extinction and others are on the endagered list. What are the reason for this? What can be done to solve this problem?
Mankinds
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Mankind
are
the main problem of many changes Correct subject-verb agreement
is
appear
around the Wrong verb form
appearing
world
, one of which is global
warming phenomenon that makes animals Correct article usage
the global
lost
their habitat and leads to become Wrong verb form
lose
endagered
species. Correct your spelling
endangered
Moreover
, if this
issue still
not taken seriously, Add a missing verb
is still
those
Change the determiner
that endagered animal
those endagered animals
endagered
animal will extinct in Correct your spelling
endangered
short
period of time. Add an article
a short
This
essay aims to investigate the reason
regarding this
issue and also
put forward number
of Change the article
a number
the number
solututions
.
Global warming that happens around the Correct your spelling
solutions
world
is always the main factor behind the reason
of
Change preposition
for
endagered
and extinct animal increase each year. Correct your spelling
endangered
That is
due to
the carbondioxide
produced from fossil Correct your spelling
carbon dioxide
fuel based
Add a hyphen
fuel-based
supply
for Fix the agreement mistake
supplies
generation
and transportation which then
impacted
on severe Wrong verb form
impacts
condtion
of Correct your spelling
condition
conditions
environment
. Correct article usage
the environment
For instance
, as temperature rise, making
ice on the pole Verb problem
apply
diminished
/Wrong verb form
diminishes
reduced
, Add a missing verb
is reduced
thus
polar bear loss
their habitat. Replace the word
lose
Moreover
, this
global warming issue also
impacted on
climate uncertainty. For Change preposition
apply
exampe
, summer can appear longer Correct your spelling
example
that
predicted, making water Correct word choice
than
sources
completely dry and the worst can lead to burning forest
. All the animals Fix the agreement mistake
forests
forced
to adapt Add a missing verb
are forced
on
Change preposition
to
this
new situation which become
severe Change the verb form
becomes
on
each year and those who can not survive will die and face Change preposition
apply
the
extinction.
There are Correct article usage
apply
number
Correct article usage
a number
ways
to control Change preposition
of ways
this
problem, to make it not arise on
Change preposition
apply
the
years later, all of the human in the Correct article usage
apply
world
needs to be cooperated
to tackle Change to the active voice
cooperate
have cooperated
this
issues
. Fix the agreement mistake
issue
Firstly
, the goverment
needs to produce more public transportation, and it will be more excellent if the vehicles are electric. Correct your spelling
government
Secondly
, the generation
to
supply Fix the infinitive
apply
electricity
Change preposition
of electricity
mostly
fueled using fossil Add a missing verb
is mostly
fuel
which is bad for Fix the agreement mistake
fuels
environment
. Add an article
the environment
For
this
reason
, the government and civil society need to replace it with renewable energy sources
, such
as wind and solar power generation
. Moreover
, this
kind of generations
Fix the agreement mistake
generation
are
Change the verb form
is
also
sutainbility
energy Correct your spelling
sustainable
cause
its main supply Change preposition
because
are
natural Correct subject-verb agreement
is
sources
.
In conclusion, global warming is the main reason
for animals being endagered
and extinct. Correct your spelling
endangered
Therefore
, citizens all around the world
need collaboration
with governments to Replace the word
collaborate
rise
Correct your spelling
raise
the
awareness of Correct article usage
apply
this
global warming and its impact on our live
including animal’s life by Replace the word
lives
switch
to renewable energy Wrong verb form
switching
sources
of generation
to produce electricity and also
use
public transportation Wrong verb form
using
especially
Add the comma(s)
, especially
the
electric vehiclesCorrect article usage
apply
one
.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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