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Some people think it is important spending a lot of money on family celebrations such as birthday and weddings while others think it is waste of money. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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In today's context, different types of celebrations are taking place in the world. Domestic occasions
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 as weddings, and birthdays are a few of the private celebrations shared among family members. Some individuals believe
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 it vital to spend a lump amount of cash to commemorate
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events
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whereas
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 some think is it just a waste of funds. In
this
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 essay, both views will be discussed followed by a conclusion.
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 with, celebrating
events
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 within the family plays a valuable factor in keeping the bond strong among the family members,
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 many families consider celebrating family get-togethers and plan
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 lavishly. Most of the individuals spend on
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 based on their spending power and status in the community. As an example,the richest person in India, Mr Mukesh Ambani spending crores for his birthday justifies his status.
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, family
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 are an investment to create memories to cherish in the future.
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, it is a just one-day celebration and in my view, it is not recommended to waste a whole lot of savings on
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events
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 perhaps spending a minimal budget could advisable.
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, spending lakhs on flowers for a wedding is a waste because floral arrangements are used only for a day and cannot be reused after the event. In a nutshell, family
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 should be joyful and a moment to create moments despite the amount of money spent. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with spending a lot of money on domestic
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 but in my opinion, spending a minimal amount is suggested. A birthday or a wedding is always a great moment to celebrate
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 it is necessary to understand the concept and plan how to conduct these
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 on a budget rather than these
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 bring adverse effects
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 as bankruptcy or other family problems in the future.

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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Significance
  • Essential
  • Essence
  • Investment
  • Nurture
  • Bond
  • Celebrate
  • Milestone
  • Achievement
  • Commemorate
  • Tradition
  • Criticism
  • Extravagant
  • Budget-friendly
  • Intimate
  • Alternatives
  • Pragmatic
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