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Some think that the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell.   To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is often argued that, the best way to motivate and encourage
people
 to
work
 hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. I agree to a larger extent to the given statement and my inclination is elaborated in the following write-ups. The foremost reason to agree with the given statement is: When
people
 are rewarded or paid
accordingly
, there is a comepetition created in the
system
 and in
this
 race, everyone would love to get first and earn more
money
. Like when we suppose a company which pays
according to
 how much
work
 we do and how many products we sell,
then
 the employees would push thier limits and would
work
 really hard to achieve success. Another reason for agreeing with the statement is: As
people
 would earn more
money
 based on their
work
, they will spend more
money
 buying things and
this
 would start rotation of
money
, so the poor
people
 could earn
money
.
This
system
 would help the governmnet to manage things, Nowadays there are so many
people
 who
work
 hard but they are not paid enough, so there would be justice for everyone.
However
, there are side effects to
this
also
 like, when
this
 type of scheme is started there would be dirty politics played, like few
people
 would cheat the
system
 and they would take more
money
. There would be conflicts created between employees as
people
 would feel jealous of eachother.
To sum up
, we can say that
this
system
 would
work
 well, but only thing is that the rules and regulations should be implimented and followed strictly and there should not be any sort of conflicts, other wise
this
 is really nice scheme, so that the deserving
people
 get rewarded.
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