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Nowadays, some people are changing their way of look through hair colour, cosmetics and even plastic surgerie. What are the reasons? Is it a good thing?

#people #hair #colour #cosmetics #plastic #surgerie
At present, many people around the world
goes
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go
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 for
different
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a different
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 way to look
more
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apply
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prettier and be in good shape and
looking
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look
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 younger. Their like to be
more
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a more
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 natural hair colour and use less
filier
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filler
filter
 and other surgeries for several reasons.
For instance
,
it's
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it
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cost
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costs
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 higher price than
use
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using
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 natural
prodect
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products
product
 like cream face ,
eat
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eating
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 healthy food and taking care of
you
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your
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 body from
inside
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the inside
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besides
 what they follow,
on
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apply
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social media has
bad
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a bad
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 or good impact on what the perfect look could be. Famous people what they wear and look
has
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like have
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 effects
although
 that be bad things for some people others can take the great ideas from influence and
left
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leave
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 the unimportant things. On the flip side, surgery doctors
also
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as well as
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hair
dresser
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dressers
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,may
advice
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advise
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 others who
is
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have
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 no need for any change for botox and facial lifting or plastic
surgerie
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surgery
surgeries
 just for money and
this
 is not fair or legal.
On
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In
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 my point of view, everyone
have
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has
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 their
on
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own
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 beauty and
look
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looks
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 so, everyone should work on
them
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their
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self-steam
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self-esteem
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 and love their one look.
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