Nowadays, some people are changing their way of look through hair colour, cosmetics and even plastic surgerie. What are the reasons? Is it a good thing?

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different

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way to look

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prettier and be in good shape and

looking

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younger. Their like to be

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natural hair colour and use less

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filler

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and other surgeries for several reasons.

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higher price than

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or good impact on what the perfect look could be. Famous people what they wear and look

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the unimportant things. On the flip side, surgery doctors

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no need for any change for botox and facial lifting or plastic

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my point of view, everyone

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their

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and love their one look.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

174 words

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