The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
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The given maps demonstrate Norbiton’s industrial zone,
as well as
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its upcoming development of the area. The alterations are pretty wide and will affect the area thoroughly. As a whole, all the factories will be replaced by seven housings.
Also
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, some infrastructures will be built
such
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as a school, playground, shop and medical centre.
Additionally
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, the roads will be expanded, and the accessibility will be more convenient.
According to
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the maps, on the north side of the roundabout, a new road is going to be built, which leads to the housing on the farmland.
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, on the south side of the map, the main road is interrupted by an additional roundabout. The shop and the medical centre are located between the two roundabouts, each on the left and right respectively. The playground is situated on the right of the map, between two of the housings. The school is to be erected
at the end
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of the eastern road.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor statistics
  • satisfaction survey
  • seasonal trends
  • demographics
  • benchmarking
  • feedback mechanisms
  • amenities
  • exhibitions
  • customer experience
  • turnaround
  • user engagement
  • footfall
  • improvements
  • disparities
  • perception
  • enhancements
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