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Band 2

You should decribe about spot club's problem In this letter: Describe the situation What shoud be performed for growth?

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Dear Sir, Today,
i
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I
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 am going to
demonsrate
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demonstrate
you
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to you
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 about
sports
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the sports
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 club. For five years they have been going on working.
Truely
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Truly
, there Most tutors have been learning their skills as soon as possible. Some tutors are getting bored
why
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with why
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 their
work
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 will be back or not increased well done. After all, they will
work
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 out the paramount solution.
That is
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 announced to the public. 50% of
payment
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the payment
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 will not
got
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be
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. But, Opposite Sport's club leaders bother them. And they
also
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 put
these way
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this way
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,
as a result
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 their
work
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 again decreased. Despite
of
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apply
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the
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this
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 fact, Some
partner
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partners
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 stop coming here. I would require you to help multiply
advertisement
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advertisements
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. Only after having done
this
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work
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, I think, Soonly, Pupils may be
increase
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an increase
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 of their numbers. I consider that You will pick out the best choices for us. Thank you beforehand. I am looking forward to
expecting
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receiving
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 your idea or decision.
Your
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Yours
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 sincerely: Jumayeva Sarvinka.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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