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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map showed
two
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 sites where it is possible to build a new supermarket in a town.
Overall
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, 
the
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site
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 number 2
demonstrates
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would
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that would
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 be a lot
of
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apply
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better than
site
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 number 1, the main
raison
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reason
of
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for
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 it is because
the
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site
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 2 is
the
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in the
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 middle of the city,
while
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 another is localized on
countrysyde
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countryside
.  First
of
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to be observed that
site
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 2 is completely in the middle of town, where has
two
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 types of different lines passing through, as a railway and main roads. In
additional
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, it is around
of
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two
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 cities, there is a huge industry area and
finally
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,
two
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camps'
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camps
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 housing. 
On the other hand
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,
the
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site
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 1 is outside of downtown, and between
of
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it, there is the road and railway which it could be easy
to
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for
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 someone
how
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who
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 is coming out or in from
job
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a job
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,
travel
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travelling
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,
another
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to another
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 city or even just passing by. Because
this
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 position,
it
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apply
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can be of high
interisting
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interest
.
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However
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 it will turn really far to other cities. Clarity
the
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in the
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 idea about
the
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apply
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site
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 2
become
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becomes
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 more
attrative
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attractive
 than
the
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apply
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site
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 1, especially because
of
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apply
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place can be a key to
sucess
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success
.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
  • density
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