Newspapers have an enormous influence to people`s opinion and ideas.

Nowadays people`s
opinion
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and ideas are influenced by newspapers. In my point of view, it is a negative development that provides several changes and consequences.
Firstly
, by reading a newspaper individuals take out useless or dangerous information. Today, some articles consist of huge
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of data and readers are certain that most of all are correct and useful. But information
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them to different actions or thoughts.
For instance
, when people read an article
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explained
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how was killed someone or published stories about stolen things, some individuals decide to be like them. Under
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circumstances, we should avoid thought-provoking posts in order to be in safety.
Secondly
, there is
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of losing our personal ideas and creativity. Indeed, we are changing our minds,
while
we are reading a passage.
After
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we will forget what priorities we have had at the beginning.
For example
, the newspaper that encourages us to be more independent, made a lot of people act like they are
queen
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or king
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear logical structure and the introduction and conclusion are weak. Work on improving the organization of ideas and ensure that the introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more appropriate and precise language to convey your ideas. Work on using a variety of cohesive devices to improve coherence and cohesion.
grammatical range
There is a noticeable lack of grammatical accuracy and variety in sentence structures. Pay attention to sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and appropriate use of conjunctions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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