54.The diagram shows the stages of processing cocoa beans. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The graphic illustrates the steps in processing the

cocoa

beans

Overall

, it is a 3 step, linear process. It begins with picking

beans

, and in the second step is separated

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into

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two processes,

finally

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finally,

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it results in two different

products

for consumers. First of all,

cocoa

beans

are picked up, the shell is

seperated

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separated

separate

from the

beans

and

then

dried. In the second step, the

products

are pressed leading to

cocoa

liquor, which

this

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apply

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is separated into two

process

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processes

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, in one of

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them

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, it will continue pressing the

products

, converting it

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into

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cocoa

cake and

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apply

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cocoa

. The

cocoa

cake is grided into

cocoa

powder, with

cocoa

can be converted

also

into industry cake drinks, consumer can consume these

products

, or directly buy

cocoa

powder. In the other process, the

products

will be refined, leading to industrial

chocolate

, another

posibility

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possibility

of getting industrial

chocolate

is by

cocoa

. Sugar should be added to the industrial

chocolate

, and it will continue processed creating

chocolate

products

, and

this

Correct pronoun usage

that

show examples

can be sold to consumers.

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54.The diagram shows the stages of processing cocoa beans. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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