55.The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

55.The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The graphic illustrates the process by which instant
noodles
are produced.
Overall
, is an 8-step and linear process. The main material used is flour, water and oil, which
finally
results in instant
noodles
. First of all, a track will go to the storage silos and carry flour to the mixer, in order to put water, oil and flour together and get the mixture needed for the
noodles
. After the mass is produced,
this
is transported by the rollers to the next stage. In the third step, the mass is converted into dough sheets and
then
to strips, so they have the shape of
noodles
. In the following step, the
noodles
are cooked with only oil, so individuals only need to add water and can eat them instantly, after being cooked, they are dried out, so they are able to be put into cups with the vegetables and different flavour spices.
Finally
, the cups are labelled and sealed for sale.
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