57.The diagram below illustrates the carbon cycle in nature. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

57.The diagram below illustrates the carbon cycle in nature. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The graphic shows the
carbon
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cycle
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in nature.
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, is around 6-step, natural and
cycle
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process,
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human factors
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affect the balance to complete the
cycle
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. First of all, the energy from the sun is transformed into organic
carbon
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through a process in
plants
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known as photosynthesis.
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organic
carbon
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is
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transferred underground when
plants
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, and the animals that feed on them, die and decay and waste products.
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, some of
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carbon
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is trapped underground in the form of fossils and fossil fuels.
Carbon
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is
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released back into the atmosphere,
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, through various means. One is when animals and
plants
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respire, and another is when humans burn fossil fuels in cars and factories, and
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all causes the release of
carbon
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dioxide in the air.
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, all
this
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carbon
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enters the atmosphere as CO2. It is
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reabsorbed by
plants
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and
then
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the
cycle
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begins again.
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