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some people belive that people must work all chapter of their life. do you agree?

#people #belive #work #chapter #life
The supplied chart depicts data on
comparison
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a comparison
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 of
household's
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household
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 expenditures during a week in one society in two different years, 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, the most
expences
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expenses
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 of people were spent
for
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on
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 food in 2018 and their leisure activities,
while
 the least of their income
allocated
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was allocated
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 to fuel and power,
houshold
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household
 goods, and personal goods.
According to
 the chart, the food expenses of people had
dramaticaly
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dramatically
 decreased from 30% to just over 15% in the 50-year period.
Conversley
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Conversely
, housing, transportation, and
liesure
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leisure
 had experienced a significant increase from 10 to about 20, 7 to 14, and 8 to 23, respectively.
Although
 the percentage of the
people
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 income that went on household goods remained unchanged
with
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at
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 nearly 7 percent, the expenditures related to personal commodities, 4% to 8%, and clothing and
footware
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footwear
, 5% to 10%, doubled from 1968 to 2018.
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