62.The bar chart shows the number of tourists in three nations who traveled to New Zealand in 1999 and 2009. The graph below shows the number of tourists who spent their holiday in two different ways. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

62.The bar chart shows the number of tourists in three nations who traveled to New Zealand in 1999 and 2009. The graph below shows the number of tourists who spent their holiday in two different ways. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph below illustrates the
number
of individuals who travelled from the UK, the US and Japan to New
Zealand
in 1999 and 2009, in the second chart, shows the
number
of visitors who spent their holiday in two different ways.
Overall
the
number
of tourists from the United Kingdom and the United States increased
while
Japanese decreased. The
number
of individuals who spent their holiday backpacking rose moderately over the years
while
the ones staying at resorts dropped steadily. In 1999, there were 1,000,000
people
from the United Kingdom who went to New
Zealand
,
this
number
jumped to 1,600,000 in the next ten years,
while
the US in 1999 had only 800,000
people
who visited New
Zealand
, it almost doubled in 2009, with 1,500,000.
Furthermore
, approximately 1,500,000 Japanese
people
went to New
Zealand
, but
this
decreased to just over 1,100,000 in 2009. Around 250,000
people
spent their holidays backpacking in 1999,
this
grew modestly to 7,500,000 in 2004, and it continued rising significantly, ending the period with just over 1,000,000 individuals spending their holiday backpacking.
Finally
, around 1,550,000
people
spent their holidays staying at resorts in 1999,
this
climbed to just under 2,500,000 in 2004, but in the
last
5 years it went down to just over 1,000,000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, zealand, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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