62.The bar chart shows the number of tourists in three nations who traveled to New Zealand in 1999 and 2009. The graph below shows the number of tourists who spent their holiday in two different ways. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

62.The bar chart shows the number of tourists in three nations who traveled to New Zealand in 1999 and 2009. The graph below shows the number of tourists who spent their holiday in two different ways. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph below illustrates the
number
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of individuals who travelled from the UK, the US and Japan to New
Zealand
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in 1999 and 2009, in the second chart, shows the
number
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of visitors who spent their holiday in two different ways.
Overall
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the
number
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of tourists from the United Kingdom and the United States increased
while
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Japanese decreased. The
number
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of individuals who spent their holiday backpacking rose moderately over the years
while
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the ones staying at resorts dropped steadily. In 1999, there were 1,000,000
people
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from the United Kingdom who went to New
Zealand
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,
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number
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jumped to 1,600,000 in the next ten years,
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the US in 1999 had only 800,000
people
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who visited New
Zealand
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, it almost doubled in 2009, with 1,500,000.
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, approximately 1,500,000 Japanese
people
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went to New
Zealand
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, but
this
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decreased to just over 1,100,000 in 2009. Around 250,000
people
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spent their holidays backpacking in 1999,
this
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grew modestly to 7,500,000 in 2004, and it continued rising significantly, ending the period with just over 1,000,000 individuals spending their holiday backpacking.
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, around 1,550,000
people
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spent their holidays staying at resorts in 1999,
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climbed to just under 2,500,000 in 2004, but in the
last
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5 years it went down to just over 1,000,000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, zealand, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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