66.The charts below show how water was used in Australia in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

66.The charts below show how water was used in Australia in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie chart illustrates the
water
consumed in
Australia
in 2004, and in the bar graph it shows
,
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the residential
water
use.
Overall
, most
water
is consumed in houses in
Australia
, specifically in the bathrooms and gardens.
While
the other mentioned places do not occupy a significant percentage. 57% of the total amount of
water
used in 2004 in
Australia
was in residential places, specifically houses, having the largest
overall
share. Followed by apartments, which have a proportion of 13%,
while
one-tenth of
water
is consumed in business. Industry uses 11% of
water
in
Australia
, and the government consumes 5% less than the industry, and the 3% rest is used in other places. 27% of the
water
used in residential areas is distributed to the garden, which is 1% more than the percentage of the bathroom, with 28%.
Furthermore
, one-fifth of the
water
consumed is used to wash clothes, which is double the
water
used in the kitchen, which is 10%,
finally
, the rest consumed
water
, which is 15%, is used in toilets.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, australia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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