70.The government has the duty to ensure that its citizens have a healthy diet, while others believe this is individuals’ responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Some say that the
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government
can promote healthy practices, the Use synonyms
individuals
, themselves, are the ones responsible for what they eat.
On the one hand, the Use synonyms
government
has a duty to protect the health of its citizens by implementing policies and regulations that promote healthy practices. Taking measures that ensure that the products that are sold in the nation are safe and healthy, so cases of diseases and illness can be reduced. Use synonyms
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For example
, there has been an increase in cases of diabetes because of the large amount of Linking Words
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know that fast food is not good for their bodies, but they still eat it. In my opinion, nobody can stop others from doing something that they want, so Use synonyms
people
, themselves should be in charge of having a healthy diet.
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government
can advise citizens about what they should eat and what not, is the individual who decides if they want to listen or not, and they are the ones that should be aware of what they eat.Use synonyms
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