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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by theis annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by theis annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph compares the number of
family
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families
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 in five different
income
levels
 in 2007, 2011, and 2015. In general, the number of
family
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families
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 in all
income
levels
 had increased gradually over the period, despite one
income
levels
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level
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 that
remined
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remained
 unchanged. In detail,
family
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families
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 with
income
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an income
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$
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of $
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100,000 or more, which
the
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 majority of the population, had experienced a marked
increased
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 from around 29
million
 in 2007 to over 32
million
 in 2015, except for
the
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a
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 small dip in 2011.
Likewise
,
number
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the number
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 of
family
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families
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 with
income
 less than $25,000
had
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rosed
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rose
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 gradually from 25
million
 to around 27
million
 in the same period.
On the other hand
,
family
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families
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 with
income
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an income
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 level
$
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of $
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25,000-$49,999 had increased steadily from around 26
million
 in 2007 to around 28
million
 in 2015.
Similarly
,
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families
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family
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families
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 with
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an income
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income
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an income
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 level
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of $
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$
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of $
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75,000-$99,999, which the smallest population,
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had
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rose
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 steadily from almost 15
million
 to 15
million
 in the same year.
However
,
while
 the other four
income
levels
 had increased,
family
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families
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 with
income
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incomes
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$
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of $
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50,000-$74,999
remined
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remained
 constant
around
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at around
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 21
million
 in the same period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, levels, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • households
  • annual income
  • distribution
  • income brackets
  • trend
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • increase/decrease
  • financial crisis
  • middle-class
  • high-income
  • low-income
  • economic factors
  • median income
  • inflation-adjusted
  • fiscal policy
  • recession
  • wealth disparity
  • purchasing power
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