The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graphs illustrate the rate of
change
in cost from three different metals Use synonyms
such
as Linking Words
copper
, Use synonyms
nickel
, and Use synonyms
zinc
during 12 months in 2014. Use synonyms
Overall
, all of the categories showed a fluctuation Linking Words
on
each Change preposition
in
month
, especially for Use synonyms
Nickel
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, Linking Words
Nickel
once became the highest figure in early 2014, but turned the lowest in the rate of Use synonyms
Use synonyms
prices
Fix the agreement mistake
price
change
among other types of metals.
In the first Use synonyms
month
of the Use synonyms
year
, Use synonyms
Nickel
Use synonyms
prices
went up and became the highest rate among other types of metals Use synonyms
accounted
for 6%, before facing a downward trend, Wrong verb form
accounting
drop
to 1% in March and continuously Wrong verb form
dropping
to
rapidly falling to the lowest at -3% in June. As opposed to Change preposition
apply
Copper
and Use synonyms
Zinc
, where the changes were less dramatic. Use synonyms
Copper
started atUse synonyms
2
% Correct article usage
a 2
change
in cost in January and began to slightly decrease to almost -1% in June. Use synonyms
Zinc
, Use synonyms
on the other hand
rose Linking Words
Change preposition
by
for
1% compared to the previous Change preposition
by
month
and its cost began to surge by 3% in the next Use synonyms
month
before gradually Use synonyms
Wrong verb form
falling
fall
to -1% in the first half of Wrong verb form
falling
Use synonyms
year
2014.
In the second half of the Change the article
the year
year
, Use synonyms
nickel
Use synonyms
prices
Use synonyms
continue
to decline until Wrong verb form
continued
it
showed Correct pronoun usage
they
a
progress Remove the article
apply
at the end
of the Linking Words
year
Use synonyms
for
1%. The same goes for Change preposition
of
zinc
, where its Use synonyms
Use synonyms
prices
was Fix the agreement mistake
price
surge
to 2% in December. Whilst Wrong verb form
surged
copper
Use synonyms
prices
almost Use synonyms
remain
stable after June with only Wrong verb form
remained
0,5
% Correct article usage
a 0,5
Use synonyms
change
to Correct your spelling
chance
finally
Linking Words
reached
almost 2% Wrong verb form
reaching
at the end
of Linking Words
period
given.Correct article usage
the period
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change, copper, nickel, zinc, month, prices, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surge" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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