The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graphs illustrate the rate of
change
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in cost from three different metals
such
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as
copper
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,
nickel
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, and
zinc
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during 12 months in 2014.
Overall
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, all of the categories showed a fluctuation
on
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in
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each
month
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, especially for
Nickel
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.
Moreover
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,
Nickel
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once became the highest figure in early 2014, but turned the lowest in the rate of
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prices
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price
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change
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among other types of metals. In the first
month
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of the
year
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,
Nickel
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prices
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went up and became the highest rate among other types of metals
accounted
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accounting
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for 6%, before facing a downward trend,
drop
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dropping
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to 1% in March and continuously
to
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apply
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rapidly falling to the lowest at -3% in June. As opposed to
Copper
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and
Zinc
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, where the changes were less dramatic.
Copper
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started at
2
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a 2
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%
change
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in cost in January and began to slightly decrease to almost -1% in June.
Zinc
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,
on the other hand
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rose
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by
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for
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by
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1% compared to the previous
month
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and its cost began to surge by 3% in the next
month
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before gradually
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falling
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fall
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falling
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to -1% in the first half of
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year
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the year
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2014. In the second half of the
year
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,
nickel
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prices
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continue
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continued
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to decline until
it
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they
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showed
a
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apply
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progress
at the end
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of the
year
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for
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of
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1%. The same goes for
zinc
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, where its
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prices
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price
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was
surge
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surged
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to 2% in December. Whilst
copper
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prices
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almost
remain
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remained
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stable after June with only
0,5
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a 0,5
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%
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change
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chance
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to
finally
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reached
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reaching
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almost 2%
at the end
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of
period
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the period
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given.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change, copper, nickel, zinc, month, prices, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "surge" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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