In some countries, private cars are now banned from certain city centres. What are the advantages of such a system and do you feel that this is something that most cities should adopt?
Nowadays, climate change is one of the biggest issues every country is facing.
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Notion
of
many countries of using public modes of transportation can reduce many of the problems that’s why some countries have imposed a law Change preposition
apply
of
not Change preposition
apply
to use
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using
the
car in Correct article usage
apply
city
centres. In the following paragraphs I will discuss both these views and at the same time give my opinion of this
trend.
The first is that,
if more and more people will stop using a car that means the Remove the comma
apply
pollution
is reducing
. Wrong verb form
reduced
Secondly
, the transportation congestion problem will also
be solved to a large extent, because in big cities freight seems to be a bigger issue that everyone is facing nowadays. Another advantage is that in city
centre areas where streets and roads are not wide enough for cars , the
pedestrians can walk without any fear of accidents. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, in London city
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city,
the
car is banned in the Correct article usage
apply
city
centre area that
is Correct pronoun usage
which
big
relief for Add an article
a big
localist
.
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localists
On the other hand
, I am in
favoured of Change preposition
apply
this
development because by adopting this
trend 90% of movement and pollutions
problems Change the noun form
pollution
solved
and around the world each and every Add a missing verb
are solved
city
have
to adopt Correct subject-verb agreement
has
this
system. Furthermore
, this
development is having a positive impact on nature because in today’s era where climate change is the biggest issue will bring more benefits for individuals. For example
, in ,Singapore they have tried this
system it has a positive impact. And most of the people use the public mode of transport that’s why the pollution
is lower over there.
In conclusion, banning cars from the city
centre is a good decision and all countries should implement this
law in their country because it is beneficial for people to reduce transport and pollution
problems ,in my ,perspective it is an excellent system and the best solution for destroying pollution
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task response
Your essay tackles both the advantages of banning private cars in city centres and your opinion on the matter. However, the introduction can be more precise and directly address the benefits of such a system and whether you think it should be adopted universally.
coherence cohesion
There are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that affect the clarity of your ideas. Work on sentence structure and coherence in each paragraph to make your arguments more compelling.
task response
You present a clear stance and provide relevant examples, which is commendable.
coherence cohesion
The essay has an introduction and a conclusion, which helps frame your arguments effectively.
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