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In some countries, private cars are now banned from certain city centres. What are the advantages of such a system and do you feel that this is something that most cities should adopt?

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is private
cars
 are now banned from certain
city
 centres. It is undeniable that
drive
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 a
car
 has become an essential part of our life.
However
, there is no absolute agreement as some
people
 find
less
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cars
 in the
city
 centre beneficial,
while
 others consider everything associated with prohibition negatively. Surely, there are both pros and cons to banning private
cars
 but I believe
advantages
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 outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. One of the main positives of interdiction of using
cars
 in certain regions is that roads would not
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crowd
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 as we used to
.
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For instance
, if in Almaty adopted
this
system
, it would have been beneficial for
people
 who catch public transport, because of that fact
this
 is
the
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 large
city
 and
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 of
car
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average
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,
therefore
 a traffic jam appears. Another advantage is that if
this
system
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 an impact on the
car
 purchases made in another country could
be reduce
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.
Then
, local
country
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countries
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begin
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 to produce
thier
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their
 own
car
 brands. A good example here is in
Ozbekistan
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Uzbekistan
, there is an interdict about buying
car
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cars
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from another
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another
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nation's
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,
as a
result
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 they have their own
car
 brand, which they sell
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to another
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another regions
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 and
rise
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raise
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 their income. Turning to the other side of the argument, if governments add
this
system
,
who
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which
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 has already brought certain
car
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cars
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, they will get into a big minus. One clear example is that, if my father's
car
 brand
will be
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were
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 banned in our country, he could not
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sell
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 it to buy another
car
. Another major
disadvantages
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 is forbidding private
cars
drive
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to drive
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 in separate
city
 centres
people
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for people
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 whose
work
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workplaces
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 place
in
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there. They cannot reach
to
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thier
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their
 work,
consequently
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 they would be necessary
catch
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to catch
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 public transport, which is not convenient
to
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for
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people
. Having weighed everything mentioned
up
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, we can come to
a
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 conclusion that, implementing
this
system
it
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would
be
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gave
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have
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 many valuable
affect
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effects
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.
Such
 as
,
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apply
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 economic and
ecologic
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 terms and I support
this
system
.
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