In some countries, private cars are now banned from certain city centres. What are the advantages of such a system and do you feel that this is something that most cities should adopt?

Nowadays, climate change is one of the biggest issues every country is facing.
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many countries of using public modes of transportation can reduce many of the problems that’s why some countries have imposed a law
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not
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car in
city
centres. In the following paragraphs I will discuss both these views and at the same time give my opinion of
this
trend. The first is that
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if more and more people will stop using a car that means the
pollution
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reducing
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.
Secondly
, the transportation congestion problem will
also
be solved to a large extent, because in big cities freight seems to be a bigger issue that everyone is facing nowadays. Another advantage is that in
city
centre areas where streets and roads are not wide enough for cars ,
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pedestrians can walk without any fear of accidents.
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, in London
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the
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car is banned in the
city
centre area
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is
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relief for
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On the other hand
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favoured of
this
development because by adopting
this
trend 90% of movement and
pollutions
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problems
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and around the world each and every
city
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to adopt
this
system.
Furthermore
,
this
development is having a positive impact on nature because in today’s era where climate change is the biggest issue will bring more benefits for individuals.
For example
, in ,Singapore they have tried
this
system it has a positive impact. And most of the people use the public mode of transport that’s why the
pollution
is lower over there. In conclusion, banning cars from the
city
centre is a good decision and all countries should implement
this
law in their country because it is beneficial for people to reduce transport and
pollution
problems ,in my ,perspective it is an excellent system and the best solution for destroying
pollution
.
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task response
Your essay tackles both the advantages of banning private cars in city centres and your opinion on the matter. However, the introduction can be more precise and directly address the benefits of such a system and whether you think it should be adopted universally.
coherence cohesion
There are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that affect the clarity of your ideas. Work on sentence structure and coherence in each paragraph to make your arguments more compelling.
task response
You present a clear stance and provide relevant examples, which is commendable.
coherence cohesion
The essay has an introduction and a conclusion, which helps frame your arguments effectively.

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