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In some countries, private cars are now banned from certain city centres. What are the advantages of such a system and do you feel that this is something that most cities should adopt?

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Traffic
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 on
roads
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 has become an issue in almost every country in the world. I believe that the amount of
traffic
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 can be reduced by creating flexible working
hours
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 at a
society
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 level, and by increasing the usage of public
transport
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than
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 that of private
vehicles
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 at an individual level. Flexible working
hours
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 mean that
people
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 of different occupations will go and
comeback
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 from their work at various different times.
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 doctors go to work at 7 am,
other kind
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another kind
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 of workers like police officers will do the same thing but at 6 am.
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 apply to leaving
hours
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, possibly easing the heavy
traffic
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 both during the morning and afternoon.
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 same technique was implemented in Namangan, a city well known for its
traffic
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 problems, and the result was astonishing. The city that used to be full of
vehicles
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 moving along
roads
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,
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then
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 became congestion-free with cars moving freely and smoothly on the same
roads
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. At an individual level, the amount of
traffic
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 can be reduced if one limits oneself from driving their own vehicle and goes for public
transport
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. The reason is if
people
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 use their private
vehicles
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, most of the time a car that can fit five
people
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, will travel with just one or two
people
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.
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, if they use public
transport
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, they take up only a particular number of seats they need (
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 of three unused seats, there will be none, possibly increasing the available space on
roads
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).
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, in
China
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people
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 were forced to use public
transport
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 for a day, which
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 clearly resulted in increased space on the
roads
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 and reduced
traffic
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. In conclusion, society can come up with flexible working
hours
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while
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 individuals can stop using their private
vehicles
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 and start using public transportation to reduce the amount of
traffic
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 on
roads
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.

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task achievement
Consider providing a more direct answer to the question posed, particularly about the advantages of banning private cars in city centers.
task achievement
Make sure to clarify how your examples directly support the advantages of the system you are discussing, enhancing the clarity of your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Link your ideas more fluidly, particularly between the sections discussing flexible hours and the use of public transport to enhance coherence.
coherence and cohesion
The essay presents a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
The use of relevant examples helps illustrate your points effectively, demonstrating an understanding of the topic.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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