The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016

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The line graph displays the mean figure of

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by, Four different clinics of a hospital, weekly, between 2010 and 2016.

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, it is readily apparent that individuals visiting the Diabetic and Eye departments showed a steady but significant increase over the period of time.

Patients

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going to see the dental clinic rose only slightly,

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, The proportion of

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visiting the birth control

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fluctuated throughout the years and never increased. In 2010, Civilians coming to the Eye and diabetic clinics were nearly 130 and 70 respectively. The number of

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going to the Diabetic departments started rising from 2010 to 2012 and remained steady till 2014 (around 99),

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suddenly shot up to 180 clients in 2016. In comparison,

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visiting the Eyesight section in 2010 increased slightly in 2012 to 150 but

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surged dramatically to 350

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weekly, in 2016.

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, The Dental department only had 100

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weekly in 2010 but halved by 2012 (50),

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it increased to 130 visitors in 2014, it remained steady till 2016.

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, the total amount of visitors at the birth control centre was the highest amongst the 4 in 2010 (around 250) and

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increased to 250 in 2012 but

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declined in 2014 nearly to 180 individuals and

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again in 2016 to 250 again

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Genetically engineered food is an important issue in modern society. Some people think that it will improve people's lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

The images below explain the process of how pollutants from modern life becomeacid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.