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Band 5.5

You and your family are moving to another country for work, and you are looking to buy a house there. Write a letter to a property agent. In your letter: Introduce yourself and your family Describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find Give your preference for the location of the accommodation Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: To whom it may concern,

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Dear sir, I am Akanksha, writing
this
 letter to inform you that I am going to shift to your country UAE for my work in few days, I am searching to buy a house for me and my family to stay near to Diare Dubai. In my family there are 4 members together, for that I am looking fora 2bedroom apartment in well well-known society.
The society
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 should be safe and in a crowded place
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 if the flat is fully furnished it could be easy to shift there without any hesitation
moreover
 we need near the supermarket to bring day-to-day things. As we are new to that country planning to take accommodation near to my workplace which will reduce the time of travelling. please let me know of
this
 concern as soon as possible. Looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you for your consideration Yours faithfully, Akanksha
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task response
Ensure that the letter addresses all aspects of the task prompt, including clear communication of your needs, preferences, and purpose for contacting the property agent.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure is somewhat unclear. Organize your ideas into paragraphs with clear topic sentences and supporting details to improve coherence.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to express your needs and preferences more precisely. Consider using more varied and sophisticated language to enhance the letter's overall quality.
grammatical range
Incorporate a wider variety of complex grammatical structures, such as conditional sentences, relative clauses, and passive voice, to demonstrate a more advanced command of grammar.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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