Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more influential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

Recently, there was a debate regarding the influence of experiences before school
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, others think that it at school
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for
youth
. On the one hand, I agree
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that children
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by what they have been through before school to a great extent.
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because
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recognizing things around him, he
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memorizing what
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either good or bad things all that affect
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his mental state and even
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his personality at that age.
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child
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intelligent environment
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mean by that the family, he will be as same as where he
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. If the
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child
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a bad
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personality
which has been affected by his parents or realtives.
On the other hand
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that experiences as a teenager are more influential
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some merit.
However
, I do not fully agree with
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that
youth
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childhood but that does not mean that they will not be affected by their peers. By giving
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example, peers are the
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people who affect
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each other at
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personality after the old personality which has been formed
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childhood
time
. In conclusion,
while
there are some valid arguments to support that experience as
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person is influential than it is as a
child
, I strongly believe
that is
more effective.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • future life
  • experiences
  • childhood development
  • bonding
  • socialization
  • peer interactions
  • basic skills
  • education
  • learning
  • friendships
  • independence
  • identity
  • exposure
  • new ideas
  • perspectives
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