The bar chart below shows the number of new motorcycles sold by Harley Davidson and BMW between 2010 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the number of new motorcycles sold by Harley Davidson and BMW between 2010 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
the chart depicts
the
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information about the number of new bikes sold by
harley
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and
BMW
enterprises over the
ten-years
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of
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period from 2010 to 2020 after analyzing the chart, it is clearly seen that for the harley
davidson
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the ratio of motorcycles
show
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shows
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a downward
trend
from the
year
of 2010 to 2020
while
that of
BMW
show
inclined
trend
at the end
of decade. from the start of the
year
davidson
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company showed a massive
traffic
of buying their motorcycles beating
BMW
massively in number attracting almost 180,000 visitors
then
from the
year
of 2012 to 2016 it
show
a declined
trend
which grows gradually getting almost 140,000 buyers after that between 2016 to 2020 it went on declining tremendously and hitting its lowest point of almost 100,000
traffic
furthermore
, at 2010 the
BMW
enterprise
show
inclined
trend
approximately equal to 80,000
traffic
generated
moreover
, it went on
incresing
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increasing
crossing 100,000 buyers in
ther
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the
their
year
of 2016 the upward
trend
did not stop there and went on increasing and reaching its highest point similor vear(2016) to
davidson
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having almost 120,000 people
traffic
and continues
further
overall
, it is clearly seen that both the companies
hadmanufactures
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had manufactures
motorcycles which were brought by many visitors
however
davidson
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business got most of the profit from their buyers
while
that of
BMW
have less in the ratio of
profitibility
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profitability
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