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The diagram depicts a process on the method of producing instant
noodles
 method. The
noodles
 are
being
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produced in 8 stages, which turn flour into instant
noodles
.
First,
the flour from storage silos
are
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 poured into the Mixer
along with
 water and oils.
Then
,
mixure
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mixture
 travels on Dough sheets, which transfers
it
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to
next
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the next
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 phase of
process
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 through the Rollers. Afterwards, the Dough strips stage happens, where the shape of strips
are
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 given to the
noodles
.
Finally
, after
5th
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the 5th
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 and 6th stage,
where
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when
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noodles
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the noodles
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comes
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 out as
a discs
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discs
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 and
cooked
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 first in oil and dried out, the
noodles
 are ready. During the next steps, nothing
hapens
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happens
 to the
noodles
,
however
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however,
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 the next two stages are for
customors
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customers
customer
hapiness
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happiness
. In
the
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stage number 7 Vegetables and spices are
add
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 to
noodles
 right after they are put into Cups.
At the
end
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end,
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 the Cups are sealed and
labelld
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labelled
 to be ready for shipment and delivery to
customors
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customers
.
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task response
The response provides a basic overview of the process of producing instant noodles, but there is a lack of detail and accuracy. The response should focus on accurately reporting the stages of the process and making relevant comparisons to improve the task response score.
coherence cohesion
The structure of the essay is somewhat disjointed, and the progression of ideas is not clearly presented. To improve coherence and cohesion, the essay should be organized into clear paragraphs with appropriate linking words and a logical flow of information.
lexical resource
The lexical resource is limited, and there is a lack of variety in vocabulary and use of appropriate terminology related to the process of producing instant noodles. To improve lexical resource, the essay should use a wider range of vocabulary and specific terminology related to the production process.
grammatical range
There are several grammatical errors and inaccuracies in the essay, including issues with verb tenses, sentence structure, and word choice. To improve grammatical range, the response should focus on using a variety of sentence structures and accurate grammar to convey the information effectively.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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