Some people think that uniform in schools is unnecessary and should be banned. To what extent do you agree?

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should be excluded. I partially disagree with the statement. I believe that

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essay will give a brief explanation

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why

school

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uniform

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should not be banned. Each

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have

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of coloured

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. Schools can be easily identified based on the pattern.

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, Trivandrum International

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students wear cream

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and green colour pants or

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whereas

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Christ Nagar

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pupils wear white

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and blue

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or pants.Both

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schools can be easily differentiated on

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of the colours.

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people

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get to wear

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or casual dress since they have to wear

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a full week

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except on

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, Smart kids children wear one particular

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from

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but on

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special dress which they have to wear for sports.

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sometimes

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necessary for uniforms in

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

151 words

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