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some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Current
people
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 believe that it is a positive development for national culture to import films and TV programs in foreign languages,
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 others assume that we should support local production. Apparently,
people
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 prefer to watch foreign
movies
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instead
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 of national ones. It seems to me that using foreign entertainment resources are good influence on
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, but I admit that that it is crucial to develop domestic
movies
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 and television, so there are some negative sides, anyway.
To begin
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 with, it is widely experienced to watch and be interested in other countries'
movies
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 or TV series in the globalization time. By importing them we promote cultural diversity, which can affect the culture of the country.
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, filmmakers may be inspired by an overseas film,
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 they can create their own work referring to the original one.
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, watching international cinema may help to improve cross-cultural communication. I mean, common interests bring
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 together, especially it is necessary if we make a connection with a foreigner. Thereby, there are positive sides to watching foreign films.
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, imported cinema and TV shows create serious competition for domestic products.
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 the high financial investment
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 spent on overseas
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, national products may not have the needed income.
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, if native films or series are not successful, moviemakers will stop making national entertainment resources which may lead to a lack of cultural heritage.
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, the drawbacks are obvious. In conclusion, I suppose that using foreign film products has its benefits, so watching them is required.
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,
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 should not forget the local
movies
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, because they need to be noticed.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural diversity
  • foreign films
  • TV series
  • exposure
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • stimulate creativity
  • inspire
  • local productions
  • cultural heritage
  • employment opportunities
  • contribute to the economy
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