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The line graph illustrates the number of magazine sales by a publisher in 4 European countries between 1999 and 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the number of magazine sales by a publisher in 4 European countries between 1999 and 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the quantity of a publisher's magazine
sales
 in four European states from 1999 to 2002.
Overall
,
sales
 in
france
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France
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 and
sales
 in
belgium
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Belgium
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were
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apply
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experienced
climb
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a climb
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 over the time frame of 1999 to 2002,
meanwhile
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sales
 in
Holand
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Holland
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 and
sales
 in Germany
tend
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tended
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 to
downward
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a downward
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 trend over the years.
To begin
, Germany has a higher starting point which is around 4,5
millions
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million
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 euros,
however
, it is not
along
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long
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stading
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standing
. Germany
was
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apply
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experienced a decline until the
last
 period and reached a bottom out at approximately 2,5
millions
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million
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 euros.
In contrast
,
sales
 in Belgium
has
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have
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 a lower starting point than others,
however
, over the course of the years the trend of
sales
increase
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increased
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 significantly, and
make
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made
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 a remarkable history where the
sales
 hit a high of approximately 4,5 million euros in the year 2002, matching France's
sales
 at the same peak.
In addition
, Holland's
sales
 fell in the year 2000 and
remain
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remained
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 steady between 2001 and 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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