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Some people believe that sport has an important role in society. Others, however, feel that it is nothing more than a leisure activity for some people. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people are convinced that
sport
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 takes a significant place in our
life
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,
while
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 rest people do not find it worthwhile for everyone.
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 I agree that
sport
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 is a part of our
life
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, the fact that doing
sport
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 is not essential for every person should not be neglected. It is a widely spread belief that an active lifestyle brings our
health
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 to a new level in urban areas since office work was launched which takes in excess of forty hours per week. It could be explained by the fact that having working, citizens even commute by private car or public transport.
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 the latest investigations
in
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 the World
Health
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 Organization, it has been proven that individuals who
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sport
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 on a regular basis, live longer, show
best
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better
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health
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 indicators and reduce mental diseases.
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, an active lifestyle enhances your
wealthbeing
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well-being
 and even mental
health
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. The argument in
favor
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 of there is no need to do
sport
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 by everyone because there are some professions which require one to be energetic and strong. To elaborate, a construction worker is one of those. Builders mostly spend plenty of energy during their working hours than others expend in the gym.
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, sports
does
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 not have to be in everyone’s
life
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 if they have regular sufficient activities. To some up,
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 the idea of
sport
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is
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 just a hobby should be accepted, I support the conception that
active
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an active
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 lifestyle is the key to
successful
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life
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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