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Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientist think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In scientific circles, some believe that we should make efforts to make contact with extraterrestrial life.
Whereas
 others maintain that doing so would be at our greatest peril. The basis for that
fear
 seems to be underlined by one of our greatest primordial fears,
that is
, the
fear
 of the unknown.
This
 problem is
further
 compounded by the way aliens are depicted in the media.
While
 they are mostly confided in the realm of science fiction, the
fear
 is still legitimate.
However
, it should be reconsidered
due to
 our natural tendency to over-accentuate potential risks.
Similarly
,
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 ourselves as an advanced civilization of calm temperance, capable of reason and holding a banner of peace and harmony, to creatures of an unknown origin, is another complication that must be considered.
This
 essay argues for making connections with aliens. If there was truly an advanced intelligent life powerful and cruel enough to exterminate and exploit us, they would probably have done so by now. If we imagine that
such
 malign life forms exist, it is likely that they have a technology sophisticated enough to detect us and act in our destruction.
Therefore
, sending messages in a way to
ensure
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 peaceful and understanding communication between
the
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both sides, would be a wise decision. Even assuming that they are not as dangerous,
then
 have two possibilities: either they already know who we are and refrain from making
connection
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 with us for some reason, or, similar to us, they are not advanced enough to send messages across galaxies.
Additionally
, they may be in doubt about revealing themselves to us as our intentions and motives are unbeknownst to them. So, it would make sense to communicate with
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 an attempt
toward revealing
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 humanity in a positive light even if they are as evil as we make them out to be.
Furthermore
, the
fear
 of confronting the unknown is an inseparable part of
human
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 condition, but we can't overlook the possibility that much of it could be unfounded, based on an over-exaggerated rationale. Man possesses a remarkable imagination that has enabled us to think beyond the present and think ahead.
This
 is exemplified by the proclivity of creators and artists to tell stories of fictional universes with baffling amounts of detail, fully developed humane characters, and never-ending
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a topic sentence, supporting sentences, and a concluding sentence to enhance the organization of ideas and coherence.
task response
Expand on the ideas by providing more specific examples and details to support your arguments. Also, address both views thoroughly and provide a balanced discussion.
lexical resource
Incorporate a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more precisely. Use academic language and varied sentence structures to demonstrate your lexical resource.
grammatical range
Use a wider range of grammatical structures including complex structures such as conditional sentences, passive voice, and relative clauses. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and use of articles for a more diverse and accurate expression of ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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