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The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #travel #uk #countries #residents #visit #summarise #features #comparisons
The first graph illustrates about
number
 of visits abroad by
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united kingdom
residents
 and visits to the
Uk
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UK
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 by overseas
residents
 from the year
of
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19979 to 1999, and the second graph shows
most
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the most
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 visited
counties
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countries
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 in 1999 by
Uk
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UK
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residents
at
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(TURKEY, GREECE, USA, SPAIN, FRANCE) respectively.
overall
,the highest
number
 resident of
Uk
 visited to FRANCE . in 1979,
uk
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UK
residents
starts
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started
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 from around 12
million
after
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and after
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 that, the
number
increses
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increased
gradual
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gradually
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 to a fifth
at
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in
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 1985
whereas
, overseas
residents
visited
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who visited
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at
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the
Uk
 started from
10million
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10 million
at
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in
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 1979,
their
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there
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is
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was
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a
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slight;y increases to 12
million
at
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in
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 1985.
at
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In
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 1999, the
number
 of
uk
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UK
residents
visited
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who visited
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 abroad reached
their
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its
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 peak significantly to around 54
million
on
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, on
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 the other hand,
their
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there
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 is a gradual growth in the
number
 of overseas
visitors
 to around 27
million
. in 1999, the highest
number
UK
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of UK
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residents
 visited
to
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the
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France and SPAIN which is around 12, 9
million
 respectively. only 4
million
 people visited to the
Usa
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US
at
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in
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 1999. the lowest
number
 of
visitors
were
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was
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 in
the
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turkey and
greece
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Greece
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 which
is
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were
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 2, and 3
million
 respectively. the
number
 of
visitors
at
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to
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the
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greece
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Greece
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 is three
time
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times
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 less than the
number
 of
visitors
at
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to
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spain
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Spain
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, residents, uk, million, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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