Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encourage. others belive that children who are thought to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for answers and include any relevent examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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always been a prime concern of every individual since time immemorial. Some communities assert that challenging is
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others opine that collaboration between pupils can develop their behaviour into good. From my perceptive, both are significant
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paragraphs. On the one hand. There are numerous causative factors comprising the first notion. First and foremost, teenagers tend to develop their competitive mentality in
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curriculum as they want to achieve their goals like
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world, well-skilled and well-educated people are grown.
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time, my friend and I were conflicting every day with our grades and
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contrast,
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between the
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greatly
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they can value their friendship goals. To be more precise, it improves
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contact among pupils
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which will create
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society.
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, students
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can share their happiness,
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, and feelings as well through
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outcome is to
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their mental stress and get satisfaction. To illustrate it, when
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my college, we
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to share our ideas and thoughts for our project. I could study
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plenty of things and information through
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. To recapitulate,
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are by far the most important in each life. As far as
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they will keep good friendship. The
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healthy
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task response
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coherence and cohesion
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lexical resource
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grammatical range
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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