The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the provided diagram delineates the fluctuations in the cost of three distinct metals on a monthly basis throughout the year
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2014.
Overall
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,
although
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Nickel
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was
initially
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the most expensive type of metal, it was overtaken by both Copper and Zinc towards the end of the survey.
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, in January, the figure for Zinc had the lowest
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,
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outstripped
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prices
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the end of the year. In the first month of 2014, the figure of
Nickel
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stood at 6% change and decreased dramatically to reach about 1% in March. After an unchanged trend in April, the
price
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has
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experienced a dramatic reduction in
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month, which was followed by a trebling in
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price
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of
Nickel
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in July. After which, the rate of
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metal remained at -1% until September. After a slight change in October,
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Nickel
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value rose significantly and
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hit a high of 1%
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the end of the year. The figure for Copper was
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twice as high as that for Zinc (merely 2% and 1%, respectively). The former experienced a considerable fall as it reached a little less than
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zero
in Jun,
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the latter
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markedly three times more than the initial
price
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and reached 3% in February and after that had a remarkable drop until Jun.
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share of both metals rose gradually in the
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five months, peaking at approximately 2% in December.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, price with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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