The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the provided diagram delineates the fluctuations in the cost of three distinct metals on a monthly basis throughout the year
of
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2014.
Overall
,
although
Nickel
was
initially
the most expensive type of metal, it was overtaken by both Copper and Zinc towards the end of the survey.
In contrast
, in January, the figure for Zinc had the lowest
price
,
while
outstripped
in
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prices
in
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the end of the year. In the first month of 2014, the figure of
Nickel
stood at 6% change and decreased dramatically to reach about 1% in March. After an unchanged trend in April, the
price
has
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experienced a dramatic reduction in
sixth
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month, which was followed by a trebling in
price
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of
Nickel
in July. After which, the rate of
this
metal remained at -1% until September. After a slight change in October,
Nickel
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value rose significantly and
finally
hit a high of 1%
in
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the end of the year. The figure for Copper was
initially
twice as high as that for Zinc (merely 2% and 1%, respectively). The former experienced a considerable fall as it reached a little less than
zero%
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zero
in Jun,
whereas
the latter
rise
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markedly three times more than the initial
price
and reached 3% in February and after that had a remarkable drop until Jun.
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share of both metals rose gradually in the
last
five months, peaking at approximately 2% in December.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, price with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.

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  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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