It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

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are born or made has become one of the most debated topics in recent decades. Some people argue that talent is a natural gift ,

while

others believe that anyone can become an excellent achiever through hard work and dedication.In

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I will discuss both views and my opinion as well.

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I noticed that many artists are performing their skills from

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age,

such

as playing musical instruments and in sports, not spending much time. Some

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that they are like god-gifted children.

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families, even if none of them

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to those arts,their children are showcased

genuies

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genuine

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, a recent chess grandmaster,Pragyan,from his grandparents never touched a chess board,

however

,he excels in chess games.

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birth

both

talent.

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have to spend time practising with professionals.Under their

guidance

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they will become good artists.

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,those who want to be proficient in their interests,have to

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other things and concentrate on aims.

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,famous cricketer Sachin Tendulkar's son Arjun Tendulkar has not yet proven himself in cricket games.

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, he got many opportunities,and got training from the finest coaches.

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that some artists got

capbility

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by borb rather than effort. I personally believed that every successful person,spent a lot of time on it to make him famous.

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support it cannot be done.

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13Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

227 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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innate abilities
genetic make-up
inherent aptitude
nurturing environment
rigorous training
proficient
initial advantage
consistent practice
perseverance
quality training
prodigies
dedication
long-term success

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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Your opinion

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