It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

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with talents and other
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opinion can be beneficial in some cases, I believe that without experience no one can be successful in some
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. Population born with their
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in sport with excellent
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, they can improve their sports
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than other activities.
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,
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with talents can
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they improve their
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in some area and
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successful at something.
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of
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with talents can quickly learn it, but
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learn
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improving their
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can be best at something with their power and
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. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into
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account, I would argue that every
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themselves can achieve any goals and activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate abilities
  • genetic make-up
  • inherent aptitude
  • nurturing environment
  • rigorous training
  • proficient
  • initial advantage
  • consistent practice
  • perseverance
  • quality training
  • prodigies
  • dedication
  • long-term success
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