Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
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of medical
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. It is undeniable that medical surveys
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become an essential part of our life, especially when it comes to
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the negative
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consequences
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various diseases, like
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'Corona' that
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spread
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the world.Presently,
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medical
researches
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are
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mainly funded by private
companies
,
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essay will discuss whether private
companies
, individuals or
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the government
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to
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support
these surveys. A commonly held belief
that
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private
companies
have more capacity to sponsor medical researchers than
government
bodies. One of the main
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behind
that is
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private funding is essentially an investment that should generate
a
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revenue for
such
companies
in the
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.
Additionally
, individuals like a
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billionaire
George Soros usually
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worries
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about a loss since they
makes
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a profit in their other businesses. In comparison
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the
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government
funding
that
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should
to
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allocate
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budget for a specific purpose without
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of income in the future. The
government
bodies usually
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to solve more relevant issues,
for instance
, it could be
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the improvement
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of infrastructure or agriculture problems that should
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in the short term.
Furthermore
, the authorities must give an account of tax expenditure to their citizens. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned above I tend to think that
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of the
medicle
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medical
researches
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research
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should be supported by private
companies
,
instead
of
the
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government
bodies which
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very limited resources and abilities to fund
such
projects.
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