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The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.

The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2007.
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The given line graph illustrates the
number
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 of overseas
students
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 from three countries (the US, the UK,
Australia
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and Australia
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) over a period of 5 years (2002-2007).
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, what stands out from the graph is that the highest quantity of foreign
students
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 was from the US compared to 2 other countries over the period. The figures for the UK showed A decrease,
while
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 the
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 of
students
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 from Australia remained stable. Looking at the details, the highest
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 of
students
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 who studied abroad was from the USA with 50000
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, followed by the UK
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 30000
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 in 2002.
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 the former showed a decrease to around 47000
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 in 2004 before growing to the starting point, the latter remained stable at 30000
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 in 2003 before dropping to around 20000
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 in 2007.
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, the lowest
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 of
students
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 was from Australia, starting at 10000
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 in 2002. The figure declined to around 9000
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 in 2004 and rose to 10000
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 before levelling out in 2005.
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