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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph depicts
survey’s
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the survey’s
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 conclusion about the percentage of
people
’s
habit
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habits
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 when they buy
coffee
 or
tea
 in five Australian cities in the
last
 4 weeks in three categories. In general, the percentage of
people
 who went to
café
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a café
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 for
tea
 or
coffee
 was the highest
while
people
 who bought fresh
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks
was
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were
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 the lowest. From the bar graph, it can be clearly seen that there was almost 65%
people
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of people
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 in Melbourne went to
the
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a
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 café
for having
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to have
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tea
 or
coffee
. It was followed by Sydney and Hobart which had about 60%. Meanwhile, Adelaide only had just under 50%, it was the lowest in
this
 category. Moving to the other two categories,
comparing
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compared
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 with other cities, Hobart
was
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had
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 the highest percentage in terms of
people
 who purchased instant
coffee
 or
tea
 with approximately 55%.
In contrast
, for
category
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the category
a category
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 of
people
 who bought fresh
coffee
 or
tea
, Sydney had almost 45%.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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 Brisbane could not touch 35%, it put them as the lowest number.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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