Task 1 The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The pictures illustrate
that
the manufacturing process of instant noodles.
Correct word choice
apply
Initially
, flour Linking Words
pump
to the huge storage silos from Fix the agreement mistake
pumps
transportation
Add an article
the transportation
vehicle
. Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
Then
, flour runs Linking Words
to
the mixer as Change preposition
into
second
step. Water and oil Change the article
the second
use
together as raw Wrong verb form
are used
Fix the agreement mistake
materials
material
to make dough sheets through the rollers. In the Fix the agreement mistake
materials
forth
stage, dough sheets convert to dough strips utilizing machines. After Correct your spelling
fourth
Noodels
strips change as Use synonyms
Noodels
disk.
Use synonyms
Here after
, cooking oil Correct your spelling
Hereafter
also
add to the Linking Words
Use synonyms
Noodels
disk and Correct your spelling
noodles
cook
for Wrong verb form
cooked
Linking Words
while
to become Correct article usage
a while
them
Correct pronoun usage
apply
as
cooked food. Drying Change preposition
apply
also
takes place at the same stage. Linking Words
Packing
process starts after the completion of cooking. It can be observed in 7th step and 8th stages. Prepared Correct article usage
The packing
Use synonyms
noodels
add to the containers Correct your spelling
noodles
while
adding vegetables and necessary spices. Linking Words
Final
product go through the labelling machine and Correct article usage
The final
become
Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
finished
Correct article usage
a finished
products
.Fix the agreement mistake
product
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noodels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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