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Task 1 The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

Task 1 The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The pictures illustrate
that
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the manufacturing process of instant noodles.
Initially
, flour
pump
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pumps
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 to the huge storage silos from
transportation
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vehicle
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vehicles
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.
Then
, flour runs
to
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into
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 the mixer as
second
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the second
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 step. Water and oil
use
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are used
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 together as raw
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materials
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material
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materials
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 to make dough sheets through the rollers. In the
forth
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fourth
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 stage, dough sheets convert to dough strips utilizing machines. After
Noodels
 strips change as
Noodels
 disk.
Here after
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, cooking oil
also
 add to the
Noodels
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noodles
 disk and
cook
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cooked
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 for
while
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 to become
them
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apply
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as
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cooked food. Drying
also
 takes place at the same stage.
Packing
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The packing
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 process starts after the completion of cooking. It can be observed in 7th step and 8th stages. Prepared
noodels
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noodles
 add to the containers
while
 adding vegetables and necessary spices.
Final
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The final
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 product go through the labelling machine and
become
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becomes
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finished
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a finished
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products
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product
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noodels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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