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the chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where needed.

the chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where needed.
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The provided bar
chard
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chart
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 depicts the information about the
number
 of
households
 categorised by their yearly
income
 in the US in the
year
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years
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 2007, 2011 and 2015.
overall
, it can be seen that there was an upward trend in the
number
 of
households
according to
 their
income
 in 2007 and 2015 except
2011
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in 2011
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.
However
, the highest and the second lowest yearly
income
 ranges
containing
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contain
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 more
number of
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apply
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households
 than the others.
To begin
 with, the yearly earning
categori
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category
 of more than $100,000 contained around 30
million
households
 in 2007, which increased in 2015
approximately
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 33
million
households
except
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 a slight decrease in 2011 of around 27
million
 families.
Moreover
, the two annual
income
 sections between less than $25,000 to $49,999
were
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consisted
around
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of around
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 25 to 27
million
familes
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families
 in 2007 and 2011 these
number
raised
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rose
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 to around 29 to 30
million
households
whereas
 the
number
 of
households
falling
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fell
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 back to around 27 to 29
million
 in the year 2015. The
income
 range of $50,000-$74,000 and $75,000- $99,999 remained similar by containing around 21
million
households
 and approximately 15
million
households
 in 2007, 2011 and 2015 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, households, income, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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