The table shows data about underground railway system in six major cities with data opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in million
The table shows information about the quantity of
date
opened, Fix the agreement mistake
dates
kilometres
, and passenger numbers from system's
underground Correct article usage
the system's
railway
in six main towns. Overall
, the oldest underground railway
was in London
, and the latest one was in Los Angeles. The longest kilometres
route was Change the noun form
kilometre
London
's railway
and the shortest was in Kyoto, which the
newest subway before Los Angeles.
Based on the data, the total of Add a missing verb
was the
railway'
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railway
passengers
could
not average based on Verb problem
was
railway's
first operational date, Correct article usage
the railway's
due to
London
was gained
775 Wrong verb form
gaining
passengers
per year, besides
that the London's
Change noun form
London
railway
was the first underground train, and the kilometres
route was the longest than others. Change the noun form
kilometre
In addition
, the underuse subway was came
from Kyoto with the least contribution in Change the verb form
came
kilometres
and less in sum
of Add an article
the sum
the
Correct article usage
apply
passengers
per year. In contrast
, Tokyo's subway was
succeeded in gaining a lot Unnecessary verb
apply
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
passengers
in
every year, which Change preposition
apply
is
Tokyo and Kyoto were located in the same nation.Unnecessary verb
apply
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