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You have just returned home from a holiday and have received photographs from a friend who was on holiday with you. Write to your frind thanking them for the photographs. You should include: -a description of the photos -the most memorable thing about the holiday -invite them to come and stay with you

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Dear Kuldip, I hope you are in sound health and doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to thank you for the photographs you took
in
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 my
Kashmir
tour
 for five days. I am really blessed to have a foreign friend like you in
Kashmir
. During
this
tour
, you have given me tremendous support in terms of accommodation, transportation, etc. You made my
tour
 memorable by capturing some stunning pictures of me across
Kashmir
. I especially want to thank you for the picture taken in Dal Lake, which is really a picturesque area. I have enjoyed every moment in
Kashmir
, as all the places,
such
 as Gulmarg, Sonmarg,
Pahelgam
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Pahalgam
, etc were very beautiful and mesmerizing.
In addition
 to that, people from
Kashmir
 are really friendly and cooperative, which made my
tour
 undoubtedly easy. I would like to invite you to my country and home to spend some quality time with my friends and family members. Bangladesh is a very beautiful country, as it has the largest sea beach in Coxsbazar. See you soon. Thanking you, Faisal
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coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing need to be more formal and appropriately structured for a letter. Consider using traditional formal letter greetings and closings.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a single main idea and that the ideas are logically connected throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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