Some people think that detailed descriptions of crime scenes in newspapers and on TV can have a bad influence on the public, so this kind of information should be restricted in the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?,

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content related to antisocial activities should be banned on electronic and paper media. I completely agree with
this
idea because apart from negatively
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health
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our
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people
with criminal tendencies to resort to
crimes
. The main reason why
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believe that
crime
-related stories should be disallowed
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it is deleterious
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of our
people
, and
also
incite some
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vulnerable
individuals to embark on
crimes
.
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instill
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the fear of unknowns in the minds of
peope
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people
who,
as a result
, often struggle to trust other humans.
This
leads to loneliness and depression because they fail to forge any meaningful
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with
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others.
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, a person might feel
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idea of friendship after reading a
crime
report where a victim's best friend was found guilty of his murder. Another reason why the real world's
crime
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broadcaster
should be forbidden is because it
also
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some delinquents individuals to embark on
crimes
. Many criminal psychologists have admitted that some
people
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inclination towards the
crime
.
Hence
, regular exposure to violence in the form of published
crime
articles or TV leads to their
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vulnerability
and to resort to
crime
.
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,
manh
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many
serial killers have attributed our media channels to
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them
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idea to commit
crimes
without getting caught. In conclusion, the elaborations and illustrations of
crimes
should be discouraged in our newspapers and TV.
This
will not only
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in increasing the living standards,by reducing fear and anxiety, among the general populace , but
also
reduce the
crime
rate by deterring
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people
.
In addition
to
this
, authorities should
also
restrict widespread
crime
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books and movies in order to
further
inculcate a sense of safety
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society.
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