In many city around the world crime increasing especially in urban area. what is the cause of it ? and how government can prevent it ?

In dozens of cities around the world, committing a
crime
is soaring and, I will discuss the possible reasons and solutions . There
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many kinds of
crime
, and each of them has a different reason.
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poverty is the most effective cause of
crime
commitment because when
people
are not able to their essential
desire
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like food or accommodation for any reason they
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to make money
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illegal
way
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like burglary, mugging etc .
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, unemployed men and women are obliged to provide food and accommodation for their
child
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if they don't have sufficient skills to find a job There is no way to survive except
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robbing or committing a
crime
. To address the problem, we can do a lot of things to help us with the rate of
crime
, but the policy-makers. must provide a better education system to decrease
Crime
, because when we have better education we will have
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more experts in every
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and more experts
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equal to a better economy and better economy
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society to growth and fewer poor
people
, so when
people
are able to earn a living and have a better quality of life
people
think of doing illegal activity for money. In many Cities around the world, there is a high rate of
Crime
, mainly, because of poverty , and politicians should provide a better education system to reduce
crime
commitment.
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