Many believe that being good at a sport is result of talent while others think that it comes from hard work. Discuss both views and give your reasons.

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I believe being good at a sport is a combination of
talent
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and hard work. Imagine certain people who
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inside them but just ignore it and the
talent
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waste
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.
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, some people try to improve
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talent
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and
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pro
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at
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that field. It's
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this sport
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things.
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task response
The response does not fully address the task. Make sure to discuss both views and give reasons for each view.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion need to be clearer and more developed to provide a better overall structure to the essay.
lexical resource
The vocabulary needs further development and more varied use of words to demonstrate a broader lexical resource.
grammatical range
There are several grammatical errors present. Work on improving sentence structures and grammar to enhance the overall fluency and accuracy.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate abilities
  • Genetics
  • Exceptional skills
  • Training
  • Dedication
  • Discipline
  • Practice
  • Continuous improvement
  • Natural predisposition
  • Hone skills
  • Supportive environment
  • Coaching
  • Opportunities
  • Amplify attributes
  • Case studies
  • Evidence
  • Raw talent
  • Relentless hard work
  • Combination
  • Early signs
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