Today, many people do not know their neighbors in larce cities.What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?
In the modern era, there
are
numerous Change the verb form
is
relationship
between Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
neighbors
in megacities and it has become increasingly common for Change the spelling
neighbours
people
having
Wrong verb form
have
a
busy Correct article usage
apply
living
, who do not have time to interact with their next-door Replace the word
life
neighbors
. Change the spelling
neighbours
However
, it can be tackled by introducing many communicative activities between each other.
It can be denied that many inhabitants are less connected with their neighbor
naturally Fix the agreement mistake
neighbors
due to
the fast pace
living of the city. It means the growing up of Correct your spelling
fast-paced
the
high-tech living in Correct article usage
apply
urban
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an urban
the urban
area
, Fix the agreement mistake
areas
therefore
people
are busy to earn
Change the verb form
earning
living
to pay for Correct article usage
a living
expenditure
of life, Add an article
the expenditure
as a result
of increasing more
insular in society. Because of that reason, individuals are unable to communicate with Correct quantifier usage
apply
the
Change the word
their
neighbor
Fix the agreement mistake
neighbors
due to
lacking
of time, even though their houses are next to each other. Wrong verb form
a lack
For instance
, Vietnamese people
working in an office have an intensity of deadline and becoming
overtired after back home, Wrong verb form
become
then
Correct pronoun usage
which then
lead
to Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
the
interaction Correct article usage
apply
between
their Change preposition
in
neighborhood
. Change the spelling
neighbourhood
Thus
, people
may not know their neighbor
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neighbors
in
a daily basis Change preposition
on
due to
their busy work.
Moreover
, the well-developed technology allowing
Wrong verb form
allows
people
to contact their friends from online apps instead
of meeting offline. The rapid development of technology not only brings many benefits but also
the
drawbacksCorrect article usage
apply
indeed
. In the past, Rephrase
apply
people
are
in the habit of going outside Wrong verb form
were
such
as public
Change preposition
in public
garden
or Fix the agreement mistake
gardens
park
to meet their Fix the agreement mistake
parks
neighbor
comfortably. But Fix the agreement mistake
neighbors
in
today, online apps Change preposition
apply
such
as Instagram or Facebook is
the main tendency of Correct subject-verb agreement
are
people
to communicate online and it causes a long-distance between people
. This
phenomenon result
in a sense of Change the verb form
results
the
isolation between Correct article usage
apply
neighborhood
Change the spelling
neighbourhood
which
Change preposition
in which
people
are unable to find interested
in keeping contact with their Replace the word
interest
neighbors
.
Change the spelling
neighbours
However
, there is a
one effective way to encourage more interaction between Remove the article
apply
community
is Fix the agreement mistake
communities
that
the local authorities should organize Correct word choice
for
the
local Correct article usage
apply
event
as much as possible. These gestures could enhance the communication between Fix the agreement mistake
events
neighbor
. It will be countered through proactive measures. Not only it Fix the agreement mistake
neighbors
helps raising
the Wrong verb form
help raise
close knit
community between Add a hyphen
close-knit
people
but also
contribute to a lovely relationship of
Change preposition
between
neighbor
, which allowing
them to have a lot of common Change the form of the verb
allows
also
keep in touch with each other. Take Vu Dai as an example, a village which have
Change the verb form
has
a
traditional activity Correct article usage
apply
such
as traditional games for children or parties for adult
to gather Add an article
an adult
every
single year.
In conclusion, Change preposition
at every
people
are too busy to communicate with the neighborhood
in an impressive way Change the spelling
neighbourhood
also
being affected by the development of technological devices. After all, it can be handle
by organizing a local event to gather Wrong verb form
handled
people
to get on well with each other also
to increase the Correct word choice
and also
close knit
between urban Add a hyphen
close-knit
area
.Fix the agreement mistake
areas
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