Today, many people do not know their neighbors in larce cities.What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

In the modern era, there
are
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numerous
relationship
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relationships
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between
neighbors
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in megacities and it has become increasingly common for
people
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a
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busy
living
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, who do not have time to interact with their next-door
neighbors
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.
However
, it can be tackled by introducing many communicative activities between each other. It can be denied that many inhabitants are less connected with their
neighbor
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naturally
due to
the
fast pace
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living of the city. It means the growing up of
the
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high-tech living in
urban
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area
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,
therefore
people
are busy
to earn
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living
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to pay for
expenditure
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of life,
as a result
of increasing
more
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insular in society. Because of that reason, individuals are unable to communicate with
the
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neighbor
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neighbors
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due to
lacking
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a lack
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of time, even though their houses are next to each other.
For instance
, Vietnamese
people
working in an office have an intensity of deadline and
becoming
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overtired after back home,
then
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lead
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to
the
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interaction
between
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their
neighborhood
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.
Thus
,
people
may not know their
neighbor
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neighbors
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in
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a daily basis
due to
their busy work.
Moreover
, the well-developed technology
allowing
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allows
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people
to contact their friends from online apps
instead
of meeting offline. The rapid development of technology not only brings many benefits but
also
the
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drawbacks
indeed
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. In the past,
people
are
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in the habit of going outside
such
as
public
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in public
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garden
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gardens
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or
park
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parks
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to meet their
neighbor
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neighbors
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comfortably. But
in
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today, online apps
such
as Instagram or Facebook
is
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the main tendency of
people
to communicate online and it causes a long-distance between
people
.
This
phenomenon
result
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in a sense of
the
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isolation between
neighborhood
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which
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in which
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people
are unable to find
interested
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in keeping contact with their
neighbors
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neighbours
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.
However
, there is
a
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one effective way to encourage more interaction between
community
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communities
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is
that
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the local authorities should organize
the
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local
event
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events
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as much as possible. These gestures could enhance the communication between
neighbor
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neighbors
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. It will be countered through proactive measures. Not only it
helps raising
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the
close knit
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community between
people
but
also
contribute to a lovely relationship
of
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between
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neighbor
, which
allowing
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allows
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them to have a lot of common
also
keep in touch with each other. Take Vu Dai as an example, a village which
have
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a
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traditional activity
such
as traditional games for children or parties for
adult
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an adult
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to gather
every
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at every
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single year. In conclusion,
people
are too busy to communicate with the
neighborhood
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in an impressive way
also
being affected by the development of technological devices. After all, it can be
handle
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by organizing a local event to gather
people
to get on well with each other
also
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and also
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to increase the
close knit
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close-knit
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between urban
area
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areas
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.
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