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Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
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 have investigated a lot of science
nation
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 and
these
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research
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 should be taken on by governments rather than private associations. In my
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 both of them are required by the
people
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 but ı
agree
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 with
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 topic. ı will outline the reason in the following paragraphs. Nowadays,
people
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 have been doing
research
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 for a long time.
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, these things have affected our lives.
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 in my view, the government should support
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 at the same time private companies have to help these
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 because researchers need to budget for the investigation. private organizations could contribute to governments because some country which has less
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, they
require
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 to aim
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these researches
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. There are many ideas relevant to
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 subject.
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last
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 month, one
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 was
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due to
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 not
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 budget which was supposed by
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the governments
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governments
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government
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.
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, private companies would like to provide
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money
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. Some studies display that if we have enough
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 we could do those faster.
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addition
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addition,
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 some
people
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 who crave to
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 anything, need to search and financial support because
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that
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 community
are
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 not just lonely to
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therefore
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 the government should scrutinize
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 process.
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,
people
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 might not control some
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processes
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 and try to earn a lot of
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. ı believed that
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 are just concerned about
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 which is not confirmed. I think that it is not important that take
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money
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, the government should control and support a budget that does regular
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 because
humanita
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humanity
 needs development which will save us.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • carried out
  • controlled
  • governments
  • private companies
  • unbiased
  • prioritize
  • profit
  • public interest
  • allocate resources
  • lucrative
  • collaboration
  • information sharing
  • confidential
  • competitive advantage
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