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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map shows the design of Brandfield
city
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 that the latest shopping mall will be built between two options whether in point S1 or S2 area.
Overall
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, it can be seen that either the S1 or S2
sector
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sectors
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 are near railway and
road
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. From the east
side
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, there is a golf course and park and it is the most spacious facility among the others.
On the other hand
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,
at
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on
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 the north
side
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 of the map and east
from
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of
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 the
river
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river,
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 there is a housing
estate
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 which split by the
road
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.
At
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On
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 the east
side
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 of the
residence
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residence,
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 there is the S1 site
that
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which
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 could be a new shopping mall beside the S2 site. Meanwhile, at the centre of the
city
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, there is
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city
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a city
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 centre
that is
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 very close to the railway at the north, surrounded by the
road
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, and divided by the river.
Moreover
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, on the west
side
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, there is an Industrial
estate
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 which is the smallest if compared with
another buildings
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another building
other buildings
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 in the
city
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.
Nonetheless
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, the industrial
estate
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 has
same
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the same
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 characteristics
with
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as
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 the golf course which both of the structures are not crossed either by the river or the
road
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.
Furthermore
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, at the south of the industrial
estate
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, there is a space across the railway and bordered by the
road
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 at the north and the west,
that is
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 the S2 site, another candidate for a shopping mall will be placed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, road, side, estate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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